The fog rolled in
on a slight breeze
shushing the din
hiding the trees
Shrinking our world
as lights were pearled
and night glowed white
(C) Stephen W. Buchanan 2020
Originally published advertising free at “If You Haven’t Got A Sonnet”
Technically this is not a ha’sonnet because it does not meet the requirement to have a volta or twist. However, in the spirit of those who write three line pieces with lines of five, seven and five syllables and call them haikus even though they don’t meet any other requirement for a haiku, I’m posting this on my ha’sonnet site. 🙂
If You Haven't Got A Sonnet 
this is beautiful and very clever; the unexpected unrhymed last line tops it off nicely; this is the FIRST poem going in my 2021 Commonplace Book 🙂
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Thank you, John, I’m glad you enjoyed it! It’s nice to have a poem added to someone’s favorites list! (The last line is actually an internal rhyme, on the second and fourth syllables, but I’m glad the subtlety of it made it better for you. 🙂)
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Whatever you call it–this is lovely. It gives me such a serene feeling.
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Thank you! I’m glad it moved you in some way. As for what the form is called, I guess it is just a “poem.” 🙂
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Thank you, Cassa!
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It was a lovely poem, enjoyed it very much!
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Your words have created some beautiful imagery in my head! Thanks for sharing!
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Thank you very much, Susi! I’m glad you enjoyed the images!
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Even the line length rules are more involved than simply counting syllables in Haiku
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I know, right?! Haiku’s have too much structure and constraint for me. But I can write a 5-7-5 piece now and then. 🙂 Ha’sonnets are, for me, far easier.
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Beautifully written.
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Thank you, Eugenia!
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You’re welcome!
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Forgiven 😂 keep up the great work 👍
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Thanks, Twisty! 🙂 The volta has always been where I have the most trouble. When ha’sonnets were invented there was even thought to give versions without a volta a name, but it was never done.
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You’re most welcome.
I’ve always thought there was a bit of wiggle room with the volta.
Besides, if it doesn’t fit the conventional parameters of a sonnet you’ve created something new; a Buchananian sonnet!
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Thanks ! 🙂 No, the creators were quite clear on the ha’sonnet requirements: seven lines of four syllables, volta and resolution. Rhyme was optional. But because I have more trouble with the volta than the rhyme, in fact I find it more difficult to create a non-rhyming ha’sonnet, I’ll respect their requirements but post what I write.
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Fair enough. I admire your adherence to the rules. Especially since I couldn’t do the same.
I still think the list would better for the addition:
Petrarchan
Shakespearean
Spenserian
Miltonic
Buchananian 😉
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Nah, it’s too hard to say. 😄
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Not if you practice 😉
I must have said it a dozen in my head after writing it 🤣
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